Monday, 29 June 2015

Trad. Arr.

“Though politicians be rational,
that is to say, lacking indiscretion...”

Though all politicians are partisan,
Having no powers of acting on their own,
We know each one of these species can
Succumb to hubris, for which they must atone:
The Iron Bitch, Awkward Ed, Ted the Teeth,
St. Anthony of Spyn, with infamous sleight
Of hand, and Broun, who felt it was his right.

So different are they in propensities,
Visible to us in news and magazines,
And in questionable shows on our TVs
Hosted by the likes of Dave Dimblebeans;
Therefore, the best that I can do is write
About a case I came across this year,
Between Clegghorn and cocky Chandelier.

The former, leader of a small party,
Would spin fine tales to earn himself some votes.
Nothing loath, he could be classed as hearty,
This hero of his tiny flock of dotes
Who'd succour them and hold out hope, not fear.
The handsome mongrel's only duty lay
In crowing loudly, to bring in the hay.

Now at election time when votes were closed,
A coalition was on the cards some said,
And so the cunning Chandelier proposed
That Clegghorn join with him, you see, instead
of voting with the reds for labouring toil.
Aligning with the right is often best,
He crowed as Clegghorn huffed and puffed his chest.

Back then, that fox got on the phone to call
Around the sycophants he knew would tell
Young Clegghorn what to do. What's best for all
the party's hopes, ahead of freezing hell,
They said was this: to seize the chance to share
In government and reap rewards next time,
When we'll be seen to change the paradigm.

With face displaying nothing but good cheer
And unaware of fate, young Clegghorn said,
“Ill be your man,” which pleased old Chandelier.
And so the party changed its tune; not red,
nor blue, but yellow through and through the spine.
“Chin up,” said Chandelier, “from now, today,
You'll be my 2iC. You've saved the day.”

“I'd be at fault, if 'No' was what I chose,
Because the party needs this chance to serve.
It's been such a long, long road for those
Of us who've been accused of lacking nerve,
But here we are, with all our dreams in reach.
And do you know what is the saving grace;
Of all scenarios, this is best case.”

“You'll do, Clegghorn,” said laughing Chandelier.
“Oh yes, my friend,” he thought then to himself,
“When you're long-gone forgotten, I'll be here,
Still handing out our gifts to private wealth.”
“Between us, why, we'll make this country great
Once more,” he said. “Oh, never mind your pledge
On student loans; you know they'll earn a wedge.

And when they see what liberal rule entails,
You'll all be lauded to the heights of fame.”
“O Chandelier, I'd hang on your coattails
And fill my boots. It seems that, all the same,”
He let it slip, “it rankles just a bit
To now renege on all the things we said,
On shunning deals and getting into bed.”

The treacherous Chandelier thought he could see
What made young Clegghorn tick. “You are, I find,
Above the mean of man's integrity,
But now is not the time to change your mind.
We know you hold the key to Number 10,
But Britain needs you Clegghorn, that's a fact,
Let not recalcitrance be your last act.

Don't be timorous. Follow those whose greatness
made them Liberal heroes, whose names still make
them shed a tear at conference time. No less
Than Asquith or Lloyd George, will Clegghorn take
His rightful place. Become their Liberal heir!”
“If put like that, kind Chandelier,” he bowed,
“I'll do the deed. I'll make those Liberals proud.”

So Clegghorn then, fair swollen up with pride,
(Such pride, of all the seven sins the crown)
Embarked upon a roller coaster ride.
At times, he closed his eyes as he sat down
Right next to Chandelier on front-bench seat
And wondered as the breath caught in his throat,
“Can this be true?” But there he was, you'll note.

There were some still – the Left – who could not thole
The fact that Clegghorn chose the Tories not
The party led by Broun, but on the whole,
They were thankful they'd escaped a Gordian knot.
Then news about the student loans came out.
“Murder! Looting! Theft” O they raised a din.
“Clegghorn has sold us out!” (His woes begin.)

As if deranged, the students yelled and cried.
Encouraged by big issues in the Press,
They beat their chests and turned themselves cock-eyed.
Their ire was roused indeed, but who'd confess
To bringing in the scheme? Not Chandelier.
Nor Clegghorn either. Yet he took the blame
And all for voting in more of the same.

“Alas,” he sighed when next election polls
Suggested that the Liberals wouldn't hold
So many seats again, nor keep its roles,
“That Chandelier will ditch us, it's foretold.
That German Chancelloress once wisely warned,
When coalitions fade, it's the smaller
Sibling takes the rap and gets the bother.”

And sure enough, it came to pass that May,
When voters cast their votes as voters will,
That fall guy Clegghorn had a dismal day.
He had to swallow such a bitter pill
That tears welled in his eyes as it went down.
“At least,” he said, “I always tried my best.
I'm sorry. Now I've got that off my chest.”

Said rivals then, “Come on, give up that sorrow.
It's not the time to contemplate our woes.
We'll be all right, I'll bet you, by tomorrow.
The proverb says, 'As good luck comes as goes'
So now we have to focus on new clothes,
And spruce ourselves to suit the partisans.
Come sing along, 'The ballot in our hands'.

As good as Clegghorn was and whether fair
Or foul demise took him from us, assess
His worth compared to others in the chair
At getting column inches in the Press.
Think of Pantsdown, poor old Chas, or of Thorpe.
Smile through your tears, for when all's said and done,
In politics, the days are long, but fun.”

The party rallied like its love was feigned;
No more than lust for Clegghorn's boyish grin.
“Liberals, Democrats, failure's not ingrained.
Since when has sharing power been such a sin?
I swear by conference season we'll be well
On down the road to retribution and
Proudly singing, 'the ground on which we stand'.”

And meanwhile, Chandelier has gone from strength
To strength, his Tory party striding forth
With influence across the breadth and length
Of England anyway, if further north
The orange order's gains gave him the blues.
Landslide defeat was not something they earned,
It's just that lessons there were never learned.

And as he rules the roost in his back yard,
Old Chandelier must know his saving grace.
Reneging on a promise wasn't hard,
But seeing why he did ain't hard to trace:
If he'd agreed to Clegghorn's AV scheme,
There'd still be coalition, but with whom?
You guessed Barrage? That would have spelled his doom.

It can be seen, this is no Commons fable,
A tale of politicians whom we'd mock.
There are some profound things that we're able
To read between the lines. If we take stock,
We'll answer riddles of the oldest kind:
Who comes first is neither egg nor chicken,
But cocky rooster, good at politickin'.

Alas, there's sorry Clegghorn, who was vain.
He paid for short term glory, then he fell
Upon his sword. But all who saw his pain
Perhaps felt empathy and wished him well.
The only ones who kick a man when up
Are journalists who'd love to see him down.
Just ask their latest victim where's his crown.

That sly old Chandelier can be compared
To one who'd brandish praise and flattery.
He'd act just like he really, really cared,
Only he'd be winding up your battery.
Less naive folks can see that crafty style.
He'll take advantage and be underhand.
Don't offer Chandelier a friendly hand.

Thursday, 25 June 2015

Archaic torso of Apollo

Notes on translating Archaïscher Torso Apollos (Rainer Maria Rilke).

Typically, in translating poetry, there are several issues a poet encounters. One is that a literal, word for word translation seldom works, neither in a poetic, nor in a purely linguistic sense. Often, the way a source language is delivered and understood differs substantially from the result of such translation of a given sentence. You can test that premise yourself, by translating into English and then back again. You will find differences compared to the original. A literal translation will give you the gist of a piece, but more often than not it will produce an unsatisfactory interpretation and a poor poem.

Another problem is one of maintaining a balance between what the poet wrote in h[is/er] own language and how that can be presented in a poetic form in the target language, without losing either the spirit of the piece or its essential poetic feel. To produce a satisfactory poem, you should be looking for a result that is close to the original in meaning, in spirit, and in form.

That brings us to the third issue, which is that of rhyme. How do you cope with translating a Sonnet that has a Petrarchan rhyme scheme (a-b-b-a, c-d-d-c, e-e-f, g-f-g)? Perhaps the best advice is to ignore the rhyme scheme. If you are after a contemporary translation, the rhyme scheme is likely to be of secondary importance; probably non-essential. Hard enough as it is to produce an effective translation, it is even harder to achieve a matching pattern of rhyme. And the worst possible sin is to force the rhymes, just for the sake of conformity. Maintaining the overall form and meter is a more realistic goal.

A common mistake people make when translating is to take too many liberties, with sense and tense, and word choices. In a faithful interpretation, if a stanza is in the past tense, the translation also must be in the past tense. You cannot change 'we knew' to 'we know' and bring key phrases into the present tense, and still retain credibility in the face of critical analysis. Furthermore, if the poet has used strong imagery and made definite word choices, the translator is duty bound to try to preserve those images and word selections, wherever possible.

You cannot change an uncommon candelabrum into an everyday gas lamp and expect the (dead) poet not to roll over in h[is/er] grave in an attempt to extinguish your low wattage tribute. If you do such things, you're in danger of straying too far from the meaning and the spirit of the original.

In his paean to Apollo, Rilke presents us with several strong phrases, which a translator does well to maintain, and a few conundrums, over which the translator easily can stumble. Those, which many a translator has failed to accommodate, include the following:

  • sein unerhörtes Haupt
  • die Augenäpfel
  • der Bug der Brust
  • zu jener Mitte, die die Zeugung trug
  • unter der Schultern durchsichtigem Sturz
  • und flimmerte nicht so wie Raubtierfelle

Taking these from the top, we first encounter unerhörtes, which translates as 'outrageous'. However, that usage doesn't appear to be a suitable description for a missing head. More applicable, perhaps, is the construction 'unheard-of', which at least one dictionary references to Heinrich Heine; a writer with whom Rilke would have been familiar. The following references are provided to back up that as a more reasonable choice than outrageous, mysterious, legendary, fabulous or incredible:

1. Ingeborg Bachmann, Die gestundete Zeit [Deferred Time], in the poem Alle Tage – Das Unerhörte ist alltäglich geworden [The unheard-of has become normal];
2. Schiller, Wilhelm Tell, Act I, Scene 3 – “Welch' Neues Unerhörtes hat der Vogt Sich ausgesonnen!” [“What new, unheard-of plan has Vogt invented now?” ]; and
3. Heinrich Heine, in Gedichte (1851), Romanzero, in the poem Präludium Neue Blumen, neue Düfte! Unerhörte, wilde Düfte, Die mir in die Nase dringen, [New flowers, new scents! Unheard-of, wild scents, that press upon my nose,].

As the statue's head in modern times has been long unheard-of – who knows where it is – the usage seems appropriate. A further thought might produce something on the lines of 'No one heard tell of his long absent head' or in a more studied manner, 'Of his long absent head, no one heard tell'.

The second noun is one that gives most translators a real problem, because die Augäpfel – eyeballs (pl.) – conjures up little that's poetic. However, Rilke used die Augenäpfel, which may be subtly different (b.t.w., it's not olde German, which was Ougapfel) or merely colloquial usage. That notwithstanding, there is a phrase, mein Augapfel, which means 'the apple of my eye' (as in 'my favourite' or a loved one). Did Rilke intend the phrase to be a metaphor or just to represent how the absent head might have appeared, had it and its eyes been in situ? Either way, a more poetic phrase than 'therein the eyeballs ripened' needs to be found.

Perhaps Rilke used the image of 'ripening' as a metaphor for awakening intelligence or maturing knowledge. If that be the case, a translation of 'therein knowledge awakened/stirred' (in which the eyes grew wise) would do better than most recent translations, which seem to take a far more literal approach to  this phrase. The preposition darin also gives a slight problem as 'therein' is archaic [sic] usage (in English, albeit not in German, which retains many of such usages). In translation, you have to go with language from Rilke's era or German usage, or more contemporary English; take your pick.

With der Bug der Brust, many translators resort to an adjective instead of the first, descriptive noun. Fine, if that's the best they can do, but surely it would be far better to stick with a noun. After all, if der Bug translates to 'the prow', which it does, what is wrong with an interpretation of 'otherwise the prow of the breast could not dazzle you'? It wasn't the curved or curving breast that fascinated Rilke, it was der Bug der Brust; a chest like the proud prow of an Achaean ship sailing forth to conquer Troy.

The phrase zu jener Mitte, die die Zeugung trug is another one that causes difficulty. Literally, it means 'to yon centre [the one] that bore the procreation'. Awkward, to say the least. The use of 'bore' is straightforward (simple past; Imperfekt or Präteritum in German) and the use of 'yon' can be retained or discarded in favour of 'that' depending on contemporary preferences. So really, it's the interpretation of Zeugung that gives rise to the problem. What did Rilke mean? To the procreation of what or whom was he referring? Is this another metaphor? Is that too many questions?

It's feasible he presented us with a metaphor for the conceiving and bearing of a child by the marble core out of which it (the statue) emerged. Many a sculptor will tell you the image is in the raw material, just waiting to be brought forth – or born, or begat, or fathered (all synonyms for procreation). Alternatives such as 'to yon centre [the one] that sustained the fathering', or 'to yon centre [the one], which bore the sculpture', therefore, spring to mind. For now, you may contemplate 'to yon centre that bore the fathering'.

When we come to unter der Schultern durchsichtigem Sturz, it must be accepted that this is a genitive (possessive) description i.e., 'under the durchsichtigem Sturz of the (pl.) shoulders'. What we are left with then, is the quandary of interpreting the adjective and its operator. Using 'plunge' (or perhaps 'cascade') for Sturz seems like a no-brainer as commonly found alternatives e.g., 'falling' and 'faded' seem to be just that; common i.e., lacking any semblance of poetic resonance. Options for durchsichtigem are: transparent; crystalline; pellucid; translucent; luminous; or explicit. You might consider 'under the pellucid plunge of the shoulders' as a holding option, not least, because it has an element of alliteration to it; a device that many enjoy.

And so we come to the final, major conundrum, the phrase und flimmerte nicht so wie Raubtierfelle, which is difficult, primarily due to the lack of specificity hindering the identification of the predatory animal Rilke had in mind. Strictly speaking, we should use 'pelt' or 'fell'. It may be acceptable to choose to name say, a lion and its mane or go with a generic 'beast of prey', however, as Raubtier seems such a deliberate word choice, with only the one possible translation i.e., predator, using that, if at all possible, seems like the better choice.

Anther point worthy of mention is Rilke's opening line. It is simple past (Imperfekt/Präteritum) and cannot be 'we never knew', which would be a translation of wir kannten nie, or 'never will we know' or 'we cannot know' or 'we'll never know', which are all present or future constructs. Literally, it means 'we knew not' or, in a more contemporary English, 'we didn't know'. The former is poetic, but archaic; the latter is dismally bland, but any deviation from those must adhere to the simple past.

In Archaïscher Torso Apollos, Rilke's subject is a headless statue of Apollo, a deity from ancient Greek and Roman mythology who has been variously recognized as a god of light and the sun, and appositely, as the patron god of music and poetry for whom Hermes created the lyre. Rilke's poem, which is a Petrarchan sonnet, is in a sense, a hymn, a paean to Apollo.

The statue is broken, headless, disfigured, yet it seems to retain something of its god-like power; a smouldering, dormant, yet palpable glory, which seems somehow incandescent to the observer, transfixed by its latent force. This blind, but all-seeing statue can penetrate your very soul – there is no place you will be unseen. You cannot hide from the truths it unmasks with its inescapable stare. In consequence, you must change your life – you must face those truths.

Here is my offering, which has the benefit of following the form and meter of Rilke's original, if not his rhyme scheme:

Archaic torso of Apollo
We never knew his long unheard-of head
in whose eyes knowledge first awakened. Only,
his torso still glowed, like a candelabrum
in which his god-like sight, merely subdued,
sustained its gift and gleamed. Or else the prow
of breast could not dazzle, nor in that feint
turn of the loins could one smile steal upon
the central core that bore its selfsame sire.
Else this stone would stand disfigured, bereft
under the pellucid plunge of the shoulders
and not shimmer like the pelts of predators,
nor erupt, out beyond its sculptured borders,
flaring like a star: then here is no place
where you will be unseen. You must change your life.